What do you all think of this poem?

The sun is my deity.


Born and dead again each day,


Living a thousand diminutive lives.





The lights fading in on the stage of survival,


And the dancers shriek to life in silence.


The hours unfold, and the ribbons are cut as it falls.





The wires skulk to the end


Of each other.


All bursts to life and all are electrocuted again.





The ends of the earth meet,


Balancing delicately on the edge of the universe,


Their brutal kisses mark the end.





For light and dark are lovers,


Meeting in secret elegance,


As twilight bows its familiar skull.





And the goodness is evil,


And the evil wants to be good,


And in their cruel kindness, nothing is sealed.





The light shines solid,


Wafting in bright, moving immobility,


Pulling itself together in smiling quiet as the night cleaves it apart again.





The night芒锟斤拷s selfish desires sink the sun,


But the night is not to blame,


For the sun has planned its suicide.





And all the world can hear the words,


Chiming harsh, and drearily correct,


As the white and the black ceaselessly quarrel.





And as the war is hushed,


The bodies are still,


And the tacit stars burn brightly.
What do you all think of this poem?
if in this world there are many person


who love you then


you should know one of them is me


if there is only one perso in this world


who loves you


that only person is me


if u think there is no one who loves you


u should know that i am not in this world





ahsan_x2_ss@yahoo.com
What do you all think of this poem?
its ok
Reply:Not too bad.


I really like the 5th stanza. But I would shorten the last line. %26quot;As twilight bows%26quot; would be enough.





I do suggest a book for you. %26quot;Les Fleurs du Mal%26quot; by Charles Baudelaire.


Some of the poems are beautiful. Others will simply creep you out.





Good Luck!


Keep it up!